Food for thought in the change and the process. And then, someone like me who read the original poem and loved it, who read it several times..will say, no apology needed - it was a good poem, it had a sliding sense of the surprising.
I like this very much. We appreciate that you are invested in your poetry. For the sake of the rest of us who have not spent a lifetime honing our craft!
Instantly seared to memory. (Though the sense itself is of losing what is graven there.)
Your commitment to your art is rare and very much appreciated…🙌😊
Food for thought in the change and the process. And then, someone like me who read the original poem and loved it, who read it several times..will say, no apology needed - it was a good poem, it had a sliding sense of the surprising.
I like this very much. We appreciate that you are invested in your poetry. For the sake of the rest of us who have not spent a lifetime honing our craft!
I enjoyed the first version, but a good haiku is breathtaking
I liked the first one, but I admit this one hits and remains like… a ghost.
It's quite the image. Thank you, Joseph!
Clears the fence of self-referential to where I live now (across the country, roughly same latitude). Keep on doing
health & balance
Tio Mitchito
Every poets M.O. :)
Really nice haiku Joseph.