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I hope the eclipse appreciates your poem as much as I did, simple and profound.

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Ah the masked beauty of ordinary

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Simply beautiful!

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And of course, your "horrible" poem is beautiful.

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It’s gorgeous.

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Lovely. I like the birds flying in reverse. I guess I could write an eclipse poem too that would go something like this:

My Own Eclipse

A plate of mushroom ravioli

damns me to purge all sins

all elements of evil

into the bathroom bin

and pushes me to sleep

to weep to wish for death

in drape-shaded rags

of a sweat-borne bed.

At last upon the third day

the sun rose warm as blood

lifts me into euphoric light

blessed to breath a new mood.

Hey, Joseph, that's pretty good for a first draft, premiered on your page today. Thank you for letting me create in your comments.

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Joseph, I apologize for this narcissistic act on your comment page. It was rude and dismissive of your work too. I blame Jason McBride of Weirdo Poetry, though, for starting me on this habit. He encourages haiku creation, but this is too much. Sorry.

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I don’t mind at all!

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I like it.

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I love this eclipse poem. It feels like I got a gift.

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How does a bird fly in reverse?

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Ask a hummingbird.

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Oh yeah. I was thinking dragonfly.

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