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Matthew Robb Brown's avatar

I love this form! This is how I wrote a short piece this afternoon and then revised it to fit the form. 3 syllables for the Holy Trinity, 7 lines the divine number. How elegant the form is! Thanks for sharing. I’m reading your Decades collection now with great enjoyment:

The dogwood tree out front

Is a master of making autumn last.

Its leaves begin to gather deep red streaks in August, while it yet clings a few crimson tinted leaves close in mid November.

A dogwood

Tree out front

Makes autumn

last. Red in

August; a

Few leaves still:

November.

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Alex Valentine's avatar

Beautiful poems--they share the aesthetics of your photos, which are also really great, sort of American Zen.

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Bonnie J. Toomey's avatar

Thank you for introducing Cid Corman. Alongside structure, I can see threads of influence in the meditative way your poems observe the world and bring solace.

This poem reflects sparingly a quietude and with it, an acceptance that comes in late autumn as we prepare for winter. Life can zoom by so quickly and I appreciate the way the words, like breadcrumbs, lead me to slow down and ponder the meanings in between the brief lines. This poem invites me to see Autumn as an old friend. Or at least a witness to a ritual or a memorable exchange. Sometimes words can go unsaid because none are needed. Bliss exists right next to pain at times, and perhaps it needs to. Rain to snow, the impending heaviness of the “brink of night,”(God, that’s a perfect way to put light’s scarcity during this season) - and an open window, breathing in blinding light…for me, the snow is the consolation.

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Huck's avatar

an intriguing form; thanks for bringing it to our attention joseph

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Sue Cauhape's avatar

These are poignant. Thank you for explaining the Cid Corman form. I wondered why you cut the lines the way you did. It's a fascinating form to try.

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Deb Hillyer's avatar

Wow I learned something new about poetry form.🤩

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Janice LeCocq's avatar

Love it! Might try my own.

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Sage Taylor Kingsley's avatar

Very cool! What’s the form called?

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Joseph Massey's avatar

He didn’t name it.

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Arne's avatar

"It's snowing" fits into this form.

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